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pitbulllady · 09-22-2007, 09:54 AM

I just left you a review on FF.net; you have no idea how much finding a new chapter made my day! I'm still laughing at the description of the dirty socks and other laundry in Larry's room being about to "crawl away" on their own, since that's such an accurate description of so many guys' dwelling places, and definately recalls my college days!

pitbulllady

antgirl1 · 09-23-2007, 01:54 PM

Yay at the ending!

pitbulllady · 09-23-2007, 05:12 PM

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Yay at the ending!

Yeah, that was one of those "IT'S ABOUT TIME" moments if ever there was!

pitbulllady

antgirl1 · 09-23-2007, 06:38 PM

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Originally Posted by pitbulllady

Yeah, that was one of those "IT'S ABOUT TIME" moments if ever there was!

pitbulllady

Yeah, it only took 20 chapters for them to realize that they love each other. XDD

At least THAT amount is better than a n00b story where Wilt and a Mary-Sue realize love in less than 5, and, BY chapter 5, thinking about marriage. I think most of the time in that sense, we don't know, or it's never been mentioned, that the Mary-Sue loves Wilt too, until he tells her first. Then that Mary-Sue is like "OMG i love u 2 wilt!!11!" and we're like "What?" since we didn't KNOW this. At all.

Zigzag is a fine example of a GOOD OC, she's not dense, she's not girly, she's not a moron, she doesn't care for her looks (at least, that I know of) has a bad temper, HAS A PERSONALITY, is British, (I assume that most Mary-Sues are American) and the main thing is, she looking like Wilt in almost every way was said to be coincidental; just a thing where "it just so happened to end up that way", and not a "purposeful thing" because its obvious that Sara didn't know there was Wilt around, who bears a big resemblance to Zigzag. The only thing about them that are the same in appearance, though, is their "frame", or structure. Other than that, their total opposites. But that's why they go together.

WiltsAKGirl17 · 10-03-2007, 12:07 PM

I've been following "Crooked Smile" since my summer vacation in Philadelphia, Pennsylvannia. I liked it from chapter 1: Zigzag is definately something-- she has an attitude, she's very straight-forward and she could kick your butt-- and she really balacnes Wilt's sweetness. I think they'd make a fantastic couple and am EAGERLY (VERY eagerly!) waiting for new chapters (this will come as no surprise to Vampyre, since I've practically begged for updates through fanfiction.net!). (When I got an email saying chapter 20 was up I almost fell out of my chair!) I really like this one, and will be following it until the finish!

P.S. Pleeeeeeeease update soon! I'm dying out in Bush Alaska!

Vampyre · 10-21-2007, 03:12 PM

Thank you so much, guys. I'm glad I've got something pretty good going here, even if it is... Very slow, both update wise and plot wise. But, hey, y'am should all be 'appy, I was originally planning on making their feelings come out at the very end. LOL, what a horrifically boring and annoying exprerience THAT would have been. Anyways, believe it or not, I'm actually updating EARLY this time. I are unpredictable, =3

Chapter 21: Delusion

Aww, don't you guys just love how much of an arse I am?

antgirl1 · 10-21-2007, 06:50 PM

I knew this would happen.

Yer not an arse, you just enjoy toying with Wilt's emotions. Now he'll NEVER leave his bedroom when she does leave...XD

Vampyre · 10-22-2007, 02:16 AM

You can cheat at this, Antgirl, since you already know the basic plot from the original XD Darn you *shakes fist*

I really do not understand why I get so much enjoyment out of making Wilt miserable. I mean, I love him to pieces, so why do I insist on making his life a misery?...

pitbulllady · 10-22-2007, 10:18 AM

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Originally Posted by Vampyre

You can cheat at this, Antgirl, since you already know the basic plot from the original XD Darn you *shakes fist*

I really do not understand why I get so much enjoyment out of making Wilt miserable. I mean, I love him to pieces, so why do I insist on making his life a misery?...

Hopefully it means that in the end, he will be generously rewarded for his persistence and for having survived all that you're putting him through!

pitbulllady

Vampyre · 10-22-2007, 10:50 AM

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Hopefully it means that in the end, he will be generously rewarded for his persistence and for having survived all that you're putting him through!

pitbulllady

Uh... yeah sure, let's go with that...

10-21-2007, 03:12 PM	#46
Vampyre Smart Aleck Woah! Look at that ZIT!... PSYCHE! Join Date: Sep 2006 Location: Black Country Posts: 299	Thank you so much, guys. I'm glad I've got something pretty good going here, even if it is... Very slow, both update wise and plot wise. But, hey, y'am should all be 'appy, I was originally planning on making their feelings come out at the very end. LOL, what a horrifically boring and annoying exprerience THAT would have been. Anyways, believe it or not, I'm actually updating EARLY this time. I are unpredictable, =3 Chapter 21: Delusion Aww, don't you guys just love how much of an arse I am? Last edited by Vampyre; 10-21-2007 at 03:16 PM.

09-22-2007, 09:54 AM	#41
pitbulllady Co-Administrator Join Date: Jul 2005 Location: South Carolina Posts: 2,276	I just left you a review on FF.net; you have no idea how much finding a new chapter made my day! I'm still laughing at the description of the dirty socks and other laundry in Larry's room being about to "crawl away" on their own, since that's such an accurate description of so many guys' dwelling places, and definately recalls my college days! pitbulllady

09-23-2007, 01:54 PM	#42
antgirl1 Baja Blast my Beloved Rapo or Rachel is fine! Join Date: Apr 2006 Location: USA Posts: 1,781	Yay at the ending!

10-03-2007, 12:07 PM	#45
WiltsAKGirl17 Dorkfish Now all I need are dance fans and I can go to Cama'i! Join Date: Sep 2007 Location: Bush Alaska, USA Posts: 583	I've been following "Crooked Smile" since my summer vacation in Philadelphia, Pennsylvannia. I liked it from chapter 1: Zigzag is definately something-- she has an attitude, she's very straight-forward and she could kick your butt-- and she really balacnes Wilt's sweetness. I think they'd make a fantastic couple and am EAGERLY (VERY eagerly!) waiting for new chapters (this will come as no surprise to Vampyre, since I've practically begged for updates through fanfiction.net!). (When I got an email saying chapter 20 was up I almost fell out of my chair!) I really like this one, and will be following it until the finish! P.S. Pleeeeeeeease update soon! I'm dying out in Bush Alaska!

10-21-2007, 06:50 PM	#47
antgirl1 Baja Blast my Beloved Rapo or Rachel is fine! Join Date: Apr 2006 Location: USA Posts: 1,781	I knew this would happen. Yer not an arse, you just enjoy toying with Wilt's emotions. Now he'll NEVER leave his bedroom when she does leave...XD

10-22-2007, 02:16 AM	#48
Vampyre Smart Aleck Woah! Look at that ZIT!... PSYCHE! Join Date: Sep 2006 Location: Black Country Posts: 299	You can cheat at this, Antgirl, since you already know the basic plot from the original XD Darn you shakes fist I really do not understand why I get so much enjoyment out of making Wilt miserable. I mean, I love him to pieces, so why do I insist on making his life a misery?...