A Question About an OC - Never Forgotten: a Foster's Home Community

WiltsAKGirl17 · 01-10-2008, 05:22 PM

Hello, all. As usual, I'm supposed to be doing homework (research paper and a news article reaction worksheet), but I want to ask you guys a question.

I have a series planned out in my head and I've started writing it a bit (the first scene is done). But before I get too deep into it, I was wondering if you guys could help me figure out if I have a dreaded Mary Sue on my hands where my original character (OC) is concerned.

This is the basic info for my OC:
NAME: Jasmine Jacobs DATE OF CREATION: August 4, 1976
HEIGHT: 6' 7" WEIGHT: <I'm not too sure here, but she's really thin>
HAIR COLOR, LENGTH: Blue <Think this color>, long to mid-back
EYE COLOR: Brown
GENERAL DESCRIPTION: Blue skin <Again, think somethin like this color>, very human looking <I have little imagination for things like this, I hate to admit>, and I'm debating adding fairy-like wings here. Pretty sharp dresser-- lots of flowing skirts and dresses.

I don't have a series title yet, but the basic premise is one day, an imaginary friend, Jasmine, shows up at the house out of the clear blue-- no creator or anything-- and asks to stay at the house. She's very very shy and timid, and is convinced that if she causes some sort of trouble at the house, she'll be kicked out, even though the house manifesto states otherwise. Eventually, she gets drawn into the "main set" of friends and their adventures. She's friendly, but-- again-- very timid and shy.

Hopefully, you guys can give me some advice and constructive critiques. If you want more info, please don't hesitate to PM me and I'll get back to you ASAP. A million thanks!

01-10-2008, 05:22 PM	#1
WiltsAKGirl17 Dorkfish Now all I need are dance fans and I can go to Cama'i! Join Date: Sep 2007 Location: Bush Alaska, USA Posts: 583	A Question About an OC Hello, all. As usual, I'm supposed to be doing homework (research paper and a news article reaction worksheet), but I want to ask you guys a question. I have a series planned out in my head and I've started writing it a bit (the first scene is done). But before I get too deep into it, I was wondering if you guys could help me figure out if I have a dreaded Mary Sue on my hands where my original character (OC) is concerned. This is the basic info for my OC: NAME: Jasmine Jacobs DATE OF CREATION: August 4, 1976 HEIGHT: 6' 7" WEIGHT: <I'm not too sure here, but she's really thin> HAIR COLOR, LENGTH: Blue <Think this color>, long to mid-back EYE COLOR: Brown GENERAL DESCRIPTION: Blue skin <Again, think somethin like this color>, very human looking <I have little imagination for things like this, I hate to admit>, and I'm debating adding fairy-like wings here. Pretty sharp dresser-- lots of flowing skirts and dresses. I don't have a series title yet, but the basic premise is one day, an imaginary friend, Jasmine, shows up at the house out of the clear blue-- no creator or anything-- and asks to stay at the house. She's very very shy and timid, and is convinced that if she causes some sort of trouble at the house, she'll be kicked out, even though the house manifesto states otherwise. Eventually, she gets drawn into the "main set" of friends and their adventures. She's friendly, but-- again-- very timid and shy. Hopefully, you guys can give me some advice and constructive critiques. If you want more info, please don't hesitate to PM me and I'll get back to you ASAP. A million thanks! __________________ Anyone can cook, but only the fearless can be great. ~ Ratatouille Last edited by WiltsAKGirl17; 05-01-2008 at 03:52 PM.